Becky's Writing ([info]becky_writing) wrote,
@ 2008-04-30 10:07:00
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Entry tags:drabble collection, gen

Title: Kyrie Eleison
Author: [info]becky_h
Character(s): Captain Jack Harkness
Genre: Gen.
Rating: G
Spoilers The Parting Of The Ways and Last of the Time Lords.
Warnings: AU. Sort of.
Word Count: 500, exactly.
Beta: [info]itinerant_vae, bless her.
Prompt: [info]set2music Prompt 35: The road that I must travel.
Summary: For everything that does happen, there are countless possibilities for things that might have. This is a set of 5 drabbles, exploring how things could have gone differently after the events on Satellite Five.
Author's Notes: This is obviously inspired by the song 'Kyrie', but it is not (repeat not) song fic. Really, really, awesome art, made by the fantastic [info]laurab1 can be found here.


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He throws his arms out, in a gesture of surrender and acceptance. The Dalek fires. There's a moment of intense pain, nerves set on fire by the Dalek's extermination ray, and then nothing.

He's dead before he hits the ground.

One more corpse on a station full of corpses.

When Rose comes and the Doctor says 'you can't', she listens. Bad Wolf doesn't bring life, only death.

The Doctor still tells her Jack's busy, saving the earth. She pretends to believe him.

Torchwood falls with the twentieth century. Earth's a sitting duck. It doesn't make it out of the twenty-first.


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He comes around with a reverse gasp that hurts.

He hears the TARDIS as he's climbing to his feet. He doesn't pause to figure out what happened, just starts running. He makes it there in time to see the Doctor catching Rose as she faints.

Jack can see the energy crackling under The Doctor's skin. The Doctor can see everything.

Jack stays with them until he gets his answers. Rose feels guilty, the Doctor won't stop twitching and Jack can't deal with either.

He leaves them on Earth, at Christmas.

Earth still doesn't make it out of the twenty-first century.


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He watches the TARDIS disappear, with a disbelieving laugh and choked sob.

He doesn't hang around waiting for them to come back.

He aims for the Rift, at the beginning of the twenty-first century.

He lands where, and when, he meant to but burns out his vortex-manipulator in the process.

A year later the TARDIS shows up, then starts to dematerialize.

Jack goes after it, and gets sucked through the Vortex, to the end of the Universe.

The Doctor says he's wrong. Jack tells the Doctor to go to hell.

Earth's destroyed by the Master, intergalactic war, and Toclafanes.

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His trip off the game station's rough and the landing's worse.

When he comes around again he knows his timing was off. It's closer to the middle of the nineteenth century than the start of the twenty-first.

He hauls himself painfully to his feet, cracks his neck and tries again.

He lands at roughly the right time and place, but with a working vortex-manipulator he doesn't have the patience to wait around.

He doesn't know the Doctor's regenerated.

When he finally catches the right version, it's at the premature end of the world and too late for answers to matter.

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When he hears the TARDIS he makes it there just in time to see her fading away.

He sets coordinates for Cardiff in the twenty-first century, but lands in the 19th. The trip burns his vortex manipulator out. He's stuck on earth, living linear time.

It's more than a century before he finds the Doctor and his answers. He catches a glimpse of what might have been and might still be, in his year on the Valiant.

He stays on Earth. He fights for what he loves.

Humanity spreads across the stars, and when Earth dies, it's of old age.



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[info]testickles
2008-04-30 02:18 pm UTC (link)
*squees* I really love this. Short-sharp examinations of what could have happened and how much the Earth relies on Jack. I can't decide which is my favourite.

One makes me hurt, two is achey and interesting, three feels a bit like being hit. Four feels like... desperation, like hanging on by my fingernails. After all that number five feels like relief and 'oh thank God' (...appropriate to the title!). It's achey but hopeful.

Overall I just love it. *hugs* Whee!

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[info]becky_writing
2008-04-30 02:19 pm UTC (link)
*spins* WHEE! Thank you!

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[info]chatona
2008-04-30 02:18 pm UTC (link)
That's just. Fucking beautiful and gorgeous and I really like the different versions of what could have been.

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[info]becky_writing
2008-04-30 02:20 pm UTC (link)
It was such a damn blood bunny that it had to happen.

*Squees and twirls you* Thank you!

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[info]skipthedemon
2008-04-30 02:45 pm UTC (link)
Um. YES. I have nothing more coherent to say, really. Except a 5 drabble set. Wow.

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[info]becky_writing
2008-04-30 02:46 pm UTC (link)
*SPINS* Thank you!

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[info]donutsweeper
2008-04-30 02:56 pm UTC (link)
oh damn girl, that's excellent and powerful!

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[info]becky_writing
2008-04-30 02:57 pm UTC (link)
SQUEE! Thank you!

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[info]phoenix64
2008-04-30 03:07 pm UTC (link)
I really liked these - and congrats on the quint-drabble achievement! Though I couldn't help thinking after the second and then the third one, *laughs* "Is Becky really pissed off at the human race today?"

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[info]becky_writing
2008-04-30 03:09 pm UTC (link)
*Cackles* I'm actually REALLY happy but you know it is kinda fun to murder them all. And thank you!

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[info]missbadwolf
2008-04-30 03:35 pm UTC (link)
OH MY GOODNESS!!!!! This was absolutely wonderful... thank you so much for sharing :)

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[info]becky_writing
2008-04-30 03:36 pm UTC (link)
I am *so* glad you liked it. Thank you, so very much.

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[info]a_proclivity
2008-04-30 03:41 pm UTC (link)
This is awesome! Thanks so much.

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[info]becky_writing
2008-04-30 03:42 pm UTC (link)
I'm really glad you enjoyed it! Thank you!

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[info]orockthro
2008-04-30 03:51 pm UTC (link)
That gave me goosebumps...
Which means it was a feaking good fic!
Thanks for posting it!
<3 <3 <3
(What-ifs are right next to crossovers when it comes to my weeks spots)

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[info]becky_writing
2008-04-30 03:51 pm UTC (link)
Oh, awesome! Thank you so, so much.

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[info]_medley_
2008-04-30 04:37 pm UTC (link)
Oh, wow. The things that happened to make Jack be Jack, and for the Earth to make it out of the 21st century--just wow. And as somebody already said, that last one's such a relief after the ache of the first four.

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[info]becky_writing
2008-04-30 04:38 pm UTC (link)
YAY! Thank you! And yeah, I think most of what's responsible for Jack being who he is, is the wait on earth.

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[info]crystalshard
2008-04-30 05:08 pm UTC (link)
Ooooh, excellent. I love 'what-if?' scenarios.

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[info]becky_writing
2008-04-30 05:08 pm UTC (link)
YAY! Thank you!

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[info]cotume27
2008-04-30 05:31 pm UTC (link)
Gah, those are gorgeous and hurt and just. Really really great. *hugs you and Jack*

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[info]becky_writing
2008-04-30 05:32 pm UTC (link)
*hugs YOU* thank you!

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[info]dune_drd
2008-04-30 05:33 pm UTC (link)
Oh, I love this so much! It's wonderful!

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[info]becky_writing
2008-04-30 05:34 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]hence_the_name
2008-04-30 05:45 pm UTC (link)
Fantastic! I really enjoyed these--you capture all the possibilities with great emotion in very few words (a skill I do not have, and thus admire greatly in others.) Thanks for sharing!

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[info]becky_writing
2008-04-30 05:46 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]cjedwards
2008-04-30 06:00 pm UTC (link)
Oh, I just love this. I like the idea that yeah, the Doctor swoops in and makes these grand 11th hour saves, but sometimes that's not enough, that it's the day in, day out rescuing that Jack does over the course of centuries that really does manage to tip the balance.

I also love this line: He stays on Earth. He fights for what he loves. because I feel like yeah, it's Jack's love for everything that makes him a different kind of hero. He's not fighting for revenge, and he's not even doing it out of a sense of duty, his hero-work is a labor of love.

Thanks for writing, I always feel that you express Jack the way I think of him!

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[info]becky_writing
2008-04-30 06:02 pm UTC (link)
day out rescuing that Jack does over the course of centuries that really does manage to tip the balance.

YES! Exactly!

and Oh hell yes, with Jack fighting for what he loves. It's a totally different kind of hero and thank you so, so much!

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[info]karaokegal
2008-04-30 06:24 pm UTC (link)
Awwwwww! Sob. Jaaaaackkkk!!!!


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[info]becky_writing
2008-04-30 06:25 pm UTC (link)
*hugs* Thank you!

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[info]unfeathered
2008-04-30 06:36 pm UTC (link)
Oh, that's gorgeous! I love 'what-if's, and these all feel very believable.

Very nicely done. :-)

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[info]becky_writing
2008-04-30 06:45 pm UTC (link)
YAY! Thank you!

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[info]shinodabear
2008-04-30 09:12 pm UTC (link)
I LOVE "What if?" fics. Each of these drabbles packs its own punch. Just lovely.

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[info]becky_writing
2008-04-30 09:12 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]adafrog
2008-05-01 02:07 am UTC (link)
Lovely.

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[info]becky_writing
2008-05-01 04:50 am UTC (link)
thank you

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[info]utopia83
2008-05-01 10:36 am UTC (link)
Oh...Wow. I love the alternative timelines, to see what could have been and what may not yet be. *adores*

I loved:

"Jack stays with them until he gets his answers. Rose feels guilty, the Doctor won't stop twitching and Jack can't deal with either."

I can just picture Jack leaving the TARDIS in a huff. Complete with flippant remarks.

"Earth's destroyed by the Master, intergalactic war, and Toclafanes." Oh yeah. It's just universal disaster. No big. ;)

It's true that Earth, as it is, needs Torchwood and Jack to watch over it.

Lovely piece. *nods*

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[info]becky_writing
2008-05-01 12:35 pm UTC (link)
Thank you, so, so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it and yeah. Earth needs Jack. Or Earth needs Torchwood and Torchwood needs Jack. OR something.

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[info]laurab1
2008-05-02 01:46 am UTC (link)
Oh, brilliant! Love all the could have beens, and the what was :)

Oh, and - present!

http://laurab1.livejournal.com/266207.html

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[info]becky_writing
2008-05-02 01:47 am UTC (link)
Thank you!

Twice. Oh, that is gorgeous. Thank you so so so much. *bounces all over* *goes to upload and post and squee publically too*

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[info]aeron_lanart
2008-05-02 10:53 am UTC (link)
I love 'what if' fic, and to have 5 of them is a bonus. The contrast between what might have been and what we ended up with is painfully lovely. Thank you!

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[info]becky_writing
2008-05-02 11:05 am UTC (link)
Thank you, so much!

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[info]hellenebright
2008-05-11 04:51 pm UTC (link)
Extraordinary!

Somehow I missed leaving a comment when I read these first.

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[info]becky_writing
2008-05-11 04:53 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!

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Nice quote
(Anonymous)
2008-05-11 07:58 pm UTC (link)

A continuing flow of paper is sufficient to continue the flow of paper.
-- Dyer


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[info]wendymr
2009-05-08 09:46 pm UTC (link)
Hi! I'm here from [info]cot_reviews. We aim to review all stories nominated for the Children of Time Awards, and your story is reviewed here in today's post. Congratulations on your nomination!

I really liked your use of the drabble form here. You've written them just as they should be, each with a gut-punch and such wonderfully effective use of language - I commented in the review about this particular line: He comes around with a reverse gasp that hurts, but there are so many others where the scenes come alive because of your vivid narration and terse style. Each alternate outcome is so plausible, and so horrible to contemplate, that by the time I got to the final drabble Jack's choice to stay on Earth was a relief.

Lovely work, and I do wish you luck in the awards.

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[info]elliptic_eye
2009-05-29 10:33 pm UTC (link)
Nicely done. I'm a total slag for slippery timelines, so I couldn't help but love this, but

The Doctor says he's wrong. Jack tells the Doctor to go to hell.

made it awesome.

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[info]becky_writing
2009-05-29 10:36 pm UTC (link)
THANK YOU!

I enjoyed that line.

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